Revisions

The first paper of college is back in my hands...graded! Oh, the horror! ;O 

• How specifically does your final paper look different from your rough draft? 
• Actually, I had written a rough rough draft before peer reviewing. That draft was complete crap. I revised that edition to take to peer review. So technically, my second draft was the one reviewed. The difference of that draft and the final paper are the few grammatical mistakes and how I worded the paragraphs. 
• Did you make major revisions to the content, organization, focus, etc.? Why or why not?
• Definitely. After reading the revisions PowerPoint on omitting words and instead use better action verbs, I took out a lot of unnecessary wording. The organization of the paper was switched just a bit, but not too much to really throw off my main topic. 
• After revising your paper, are you able to identify your own pattern of error(for example, I know that as a writer I tend to be excessively wordy and am prone to comma splices)?
• I already knew what my main issue was before I started my paper. I'm terrible at explaining the significance of papers. Actually, I don't even write it. It's not that I don't want to or I'm lazy, I just have trouble with it. Likewise with clarifying the importance of some paragraphs. There would be a lot of 'junk' (I don't know a nicer word) added in all because I can't express my thoughts onto paper.
• What guided you to make the revisions you did? Was it peer review? Rereading your own paper? Other factors?
• There were two paragraphs I struggled with: one about an old game and the other about walkie-talkies. After re-reading them over and over again, I felt a strong urge to fix everything about my paper. 
• What aspect of your essay do you think is the strongest? The weakest?
• The paragraph retelling my first hands-on experience as a 'texter' is my strongest. It uses a nice flowing style and most of it is concise. As a writer, I feel like I got the message I wanted to portray in that paragraph. The weakest are the second to last and last paragraph. They have the most errors and don't sum up my feelings or significance of paper.

Overall, I say I did an OK job. I used the idea from "Shitty first drafts" to start out my paper. Usually I'll organize my thoughts into an outline, then build from there. The plus side is that I actually got my thoughts onto the screen without having writer's block. The bad side is that it's not something I'm used to. So all my thoughts were disorganized. It's good I got to experiment with a different writing style instead of using the "same ol, same ol,' but I think I'll stick to outlining. >.>